So, I was watching some Mystery Science Theater 3000 episodes today and realized something.
I think my first submission of Time makes about as much sense as the movie Space Mutiny; if you don't get this reference, just ask Katherine.
Thanks for all your comments on the first chapter. I think I forgot how hard it is to take criticism about my work. I used to be better at it. Also, I'm used to receiving it in an academic work shop setting and it's kind of a different experience. I decided to start over by getting a feel for the voice of my main character. I feel like she should be older, and per Brant's suggestion, not a massive dose of annoying clumsiness. It might be a while before I re-submit the chapter, I'm trying to be patient with myself. I've gotten farther by writing from the character instead of dictating the story line myself. Thanks again.